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Re: Jamais Quitter [1]
Hey alice, I liked this peice pretty good! Only a few things that I thought were a bit out of place, if you know what I mean. The idiots in ...
Mar 15, 2009 -
Re: Vampire Vignettes
Hey, I think this is prolly the best vamp story Ive read on these types of sites. In the beginning you said you wanted the second story to be as ...
Mar 15, 2009 -
Re: Viva La Vida: Chapter II
Let me start this off by saying I did not like this piece. And ill tell you why. The dialog comes out unnatural and the whole thing here is odd. ...
Mar 15, 2009 -
Re: Die Kalte Brise
It was the only living occupant youre talking about wind here, and according to my diagnoses, wind is not a palpable living creature, but... a natural phenomenan that no one ...
Mar 15, 2009 -
Re: The Tale of Edgar Pastor 1.1
Hahaa, well I liked the intro but I kinda got bored, a preference thing. HOWEVER, I loved the bit where the mom just falls out of her chair... it reminded ...
Mar 15, 2009 -
Re: The Box
Huh... Intresting thing this box is. But what I kinda wanna know is if she knew the box was there, was it the box she was looking for, and... i ...
Mar 15, 2009 -
Re: Holy Rolling (7)
Well obviously this was written by a 10 year old.. i mean... someone who knows how to write lol... so i guess i cant say anything about that.. but!... half ...
Mar 14, 2009 -
Re: The Throne
Conversely, I enjoy longer sentences, that is if theyre wrriten rightly and flow smoothly, and i didnt notice anything not having this quality in this work... so I would say ...
Mar 14, 2009
